F is for Figurative Language #AtoZChallenge

F is for Figurative: Show, Don’t Tell

A guest post by Susie Kline

As writers, we are told over and over again that we need to show, not tell our story. That can get confusing! Sometimes, a green tree is just a green tree, right?

Wrong! Fiction writing is our time to tell a tale. We want to engage and entertain our readers. We want them to remember our story, long after the words have been read. We need that green tree to be oh so much more!

For example:

Ranging from shades of almost black to bright lime, the leaves of the forest cradle the branches and trunks amongst them. Stepping on their fallen brethren fills the air with a freshness that could only come from Mother Nature.

That sounds a lot better than:

Green leaves on the trees. If you stepped on them it smelled fresh.

Yes, it’s wordier, but it sets the mood. That’s what figurative language allows you to do in a magical way. Saying something is red is easy. Using that redness to convey emotion takes effort. A tomato red face during an argument conveys anger. A peaches and cream complexion conveys prettiness, maybe even innocence. A blood red sunset instantly transports you to a warm summer evening.

According to the Wikipedia article on figurative speech, the ways you can use figurative language are numerous. They include: simile, metaphor, onomatopoeia, personification, oxymoron, paradox, hyperbole, extended metaphor, and allusion. These terms from junior high might be filling you with dread, but they are the magic ingredients of the stories we tell.

When we use these devices to tell our story, we trust that our readers are clever. Referencing Einstein is meaningless if the reader has no idea who Albert Einstein was. We can give hints: His IQ was so high, he made Einstein look like he needed to be in a remedial science class. The reader can infer that Einstein must be smart, but our character is smarter.

Without figurative language, our stories would be bland and very short. The woman knit while rocking. There was a revolution. The men changed places. The husband was saved. What a sad way Charles Dickens could have told his A Tale of Two Cities. Can you imagine a world without the phrase: It was the best of times. It was the worst of times…

But we don’t need to be a classical author like Dickens to drive home our tales. We have stories that need to be shared and we have the gift of words to give our readers. Sure, a tree can be green, but it can also house fairies. Shouldn’t your writing hold the secret of the fairies?



Susie is the owner/editor of Motherhoot (www.motherhoot.com), a slice of life blog that is author/artist friendly. She is a write at home mom, still working on that first novel. The first draft is done and the editing is underway...

Follow her on Twitter: @SusieKline.


2012 A to Z Challenge series:

1. Donna McNicol  51. M is for Metaphor  
2. A is for Adverbs and Adjectives  52. M - Musicians from Australia  
3. A is for Apollo  53. Missing  
4. Dazediva : A is for About You & Your Blog  54. N - New Zealand  
5. Ambition  55. N is for Novel  
6. B is for Brainstorming  56. Nonsense  
7. B is for Briareus  57. N is for Nymph  
8. Becca @ Lost in Thought  58. O - Opera House  
9. Boisterous  59. O is for Outline  
10. C is for Chimaera  60. O is for Oracle  
11. C is for Characterization  61. Open  
12. Joyce  62. P - Population  
13. Marian Allen-Fantasies mysteries comedies recipes  63. P is for Plot  
14. C - Currency  64. Vehicle  
15. Closed  65. Q - Quay  
16. D is for Dionysus  66. P is for Pythia  
17. D is for Dialogue  67. Q is for Quack  
18. D - Distracting Distractions  68. Q is for Quadriga  
19. E is for Empusa  69. Quirky  
20. E is for Editing  70. R - the Rocks  
21. E - Emus  71. Reticent  
22. F is for Furies  72. R is for Reaper of Bogota  
23. F is for Figurative Language  73. S is for Self-publishing  
24. F is for Friends Forever  74. S - Sydney Harbor Bridge Climb  
25. D is for Disappearing Dog  75. S is for Satyr  
26. G is for Graces  76. Simple  
27. G is for Genre  77. T is for Tyops  
28. Deadly  78. T -Traveling Tips  
29. Elegant  79. Trinity  
30. Future  80. U is for Unfulfilled  
31. Garage  81. Urgent  
32. H is for Hermes  82. U - Underground Railway  
33. H is for Hook, Line and Sinker!  83. V is for Voice  
34. I - Itinerary  84. V - Virgin Atlantic Upperclass  
35. I is for Iris  85. W is for Writer's Block  
36. I is for Irony  86. W for What's you opinion?  
37. J is for Janus  87. W - Writing is Work  
38. J is for Jargon  88. Wallflower  
39. J - Jetlag Avoidance Plan  89. X is for Xylophones  
40. Ice  90. X - X Factor Australia  
41. Hoard  91. X - eXhausted  
42. Jaywalking  92. Xyloid  
43. K is for Kronos  93. Y is for Yikes  
44. K is for Kids  94. Yearning  
45. K - Kangaroos and Koalas  95. Y - Yilpi Marks  
46. Knothole  96. Z - Zacker, not Slacker  
47. L is for Language  97. Z is for Zest  
48. Linked  98. Zipper  
49. R is for Repeating "O"  99. Gail Baugniet  
50. M is for Muses  

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